Nov   2016

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5 Easy Ways to Trim Your College Application Essay

by
President, Wow Writing Workshop

This time of year, we get pretty busy giving application essays a final edit before they’re sent off to all those dream colleges. But we’ve noticed an unfortunate trend with many of the essays when we get them: they’re not done. Sometimes the essay doesn’t answer the prompt, and sometimes it doesn’t offer any insight into the student’s personality. But often it simply doesn’t stick to the word limit specified in the instructions…

Rule #1 in your college applications: follow the instructions! The word count is no exception. Colleges give these directions not just to make admission counselors’ lives easier, but they also act almost like a mini test to see if you’re taking the time to read and follow them. And if you don’t appear to respect admission counselors’ time or directions, it can reflect poorly on you as a candidate.

Recently, I reviewed a student’s personal statement for a big state school that required each applicant to submit a short essay of up to 400 words. The draft he assumed was ready for a final edit was 751 words—almost twice as long as permitted. Furthermore, the student didn’t think he could shorten it!

Nonsense, I told him. We’ve never seen a personal statement or supplemental essay weakened by the editing process.

Nearly doubling the length of your application essay is a mistake, to be clear. But even though some people may say a few extra words will not matter, I say it’s not worth the risk. Just answer the essay prompt or question within the specified word count, and you won’t need to worry.

Here are five simple tips for trimming personal statements and supplemental college essays without destroying content:

  1. Circle or highlight all adverbs—then take them out! These include “very” and many “ly” words, such as really, extremely, completely, and absolutely.
  2. Look for nonessential words and short phrases, often set off by a comma. These include things like “because of this,” “in fact,” “first,” “last,” “hopefully,” “to be frank,” “quite frankly,” and “in conclusion.” Highlight the words or phrases, and then read the sentences without them. Take out the ones that do not enhance your story.
  3. Tighten up helping verbs. For example, replace “I am going to be attending” with “I will attend.”
  4. Use “active voice” and swap out “to be” verbs. For example, rather than saying “I am a voracious reader,” try “I read voraciously.”
  5. Turn some nouns into verbs. For example,  “I concluded” is better than “I came to the conclusion.”

If these little fixes don’t tighten up your admission essay sufficiently, take a break, come back to your writing with fresh eyes, and read through it a couple of times. Really think about what you’re trying to say in your application essay, and ask yourself how each example and sentence helps you tell your story. Are there phrases or even paragraphs you could cut or condense? You almost certainly will be able to find some. (Remember, some of the best and most effective writing is the shortest!) Finally, don’t be afraid to have someone else review your essay and give feedback.

Related: College Application Proofreading Tips from an Editor–in–Chief 

Following this advice will not only help you shorten your essay; it’ll inevitably end up clearer, more succinct, and easier to read. This also demonstrates that you’re ready for college-level writing, which is exactly what admission counselors are looking for.

For more tips to make sure your essay is ready to submit, you can sign up for free resources from Wow Writing Workshop.

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About Kim Lifton

Kim Lifton

Kim Lifton is President and Cofounder of Wow Writing Workshop, a strategic communication company specializing in college admission and grad school application essay writing and professional training. She leads a team of writers and teachers who understand the writing process inside and out. Wow’s team teaches students how to write application essays, and provides expert training on their unique approach to professionals who want to improve their essay coaching practices. Kim blogs regularly about the college essay’s role in the admission process for multiple industry publications and websites. In 2019, she was named a LinkedIn Top Voice in Education.

Before co-founding Wow, Kim worked as a reporter and communication consultant. Highlights include: Co-producing a PBS documentary about teens and depression, No Ordinary Joe: Erasing the Stigma of Mental Illness; writing “First Class,” a weekly lifestyle column about the area’s most successful businessmen and women for the Detroit Free Press; creating “A Small Business Adventure,” a 12-part monthly series about the perils and pitfalls of running a small business for the Detroiter Magazine; supervising a public relations campaign and accompanying print materials that attracted local and national print, radio, and TV media coverage for the National Council of Jewish Women’s annual convention in celebrating its 100th anniversary.

 
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