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Engaging Ways to Open Your Personal Statement

by
Founder, Moon Prep

Summer is here, and rising seniors have college applications on their minds. The Common Application essays have not changed from last application cycle. Therefore, students can get a head start and use their summer to write their personal statement.           

Keep in mind, an admission officer may read essays for countless hours every day during college application season, so your essay needs to be memorable. Here are some tips on writing an engaging personal statement. The most important component of this is a strong opening.

Related: College Application Essays: What Really Works!

Show your personality

Your personal statement or application essay is meant to share more about yourself with the admission officers. They already know your academic history from your transcripts—you do not need to repeat it. What the officers will not glean from your transcripts or standardized test scores is your personality. Your essay is your opportunity to illustrate yourself. Share a compelling memory or an anecdote from your life. This is your chance to connect with your reader.           

This is the opening paragraph of Isabella’s essay:

My small body and head of curly hair trotted over to the refrigerator in search of some butter for my bread. I shifted some cans of half-opened Goya beans and the remnant of a brick of dulce de leche that had seen better days. After much shuffling, I spotted the big brown container of margarine. Carefully placing the tub on the kitchen table and readying for my “feast,” I opened the container. To my dismay, it was filled with arroz con pollo. My eyes tightened and my stomach made Chewbacca noises. Maybe I could mash the dulce de leche on top of the bread.

Isabella’s beginning is personal, funny, and relatable. The opening paragraph is engaging and “hooks” the reader to want to finish reading the story. Isabella throws the reader right in the middle of her story. This is a perfect example of using an anecdote to open your college essay.

Related: How to Tell Your Story With Your Application Essay

Three elements of a strong opening

The Why: Isabella’s opening is a great example of this. The reader wants to know what happens next; how will she solve the problem?

The Surprise: Sometimes a shocking statement works; your reader will pay rapt attention. For example: “I grew up a killer,” followed by a story about deciding to become a vegetarian. You can use a figurative, alarming statement to grab your readers’ interest.

The Confession: By revealing something personal about yourself, you establish trust with the reader. They become your confidant. This is an effective way to pull a fact from your résumé and then elaborate on it personally. For example: Lesley is ranked #1 in her high school and is valedictorian. Confession: She is dyslexic and has had to work diligently to overcome this learning obstacle.

Related: What NOT to Do in Your Application Essay

Your essay is a critical part of your application; this is the school’s first impression of the real you. It completes the picture of your identity and shows the officers why you would be an asset to their community.

Find more application essay help in our College Admission section.

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About Kristen Moon

Kristen Moon is an independent college counselor and founder of MoonPrep.com. Moon Prep provides one-on-one tutoring services catered to university admission. They guide students through the entire application process, including completing applications, personal statements, supplemental essays, student résumés, scholarships, and financial aid. Their specialty lies in the Ivy League, direct medical programs (BS/MD), and highly competitive universities.

 
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